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A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sat Jan 31, 2015 9:16 pm
by Aron

My previous masterpiece failed to entertain you, so I concocted another potion of words.
Bang.
Memories.
Bang.
Memories of you.
Bang.
Memories of you, branded into my mind, and I still feel the hot sting.
You had me from the start. I looked into your eyes and saw heaven.
You saw hell.
You cried and screamed and writhed in agony, yet I failed to respond.
I avoided you because of how much I wanted to be with you, and the irony pains my to this day.
Why didn't I speak up, when clearly you needed to talk?
Why didn't I walk over to you, when clearly you needed someone?
Why didn't I grab your hand, when clearly you were reaching out?
But it's too late now. You're gone.
And it's all. My. Fault.

This poem is a true story. When I was 12 or 13, the girl I had a crush on committed suicide, and I thought for a long time it was because I had avoided her.

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sat Jan 31, 2015 11:49 pm
by Llama
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Can we please go back to that wonderland of a poem you posted before? This is too much.

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sat Jan 31, 2015 11:54 pm
by Anton
Hm, the emotional strategy now ? Works for me ... i'm nearly crying.

btw i see no point of making a new thread when there's the mood thread to confess things like these.


I reckon a poem would be more fit in the actual literature section than in there.

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sun Feb 01, 2015 11:15 am
by Aron
LlamaPIVOT wrote:...

Can we please go back to that wonderland of a poem you posted before? This is too much.

That thread got locked, but you can just go back and read it again if you want to.

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sun Feb 01, 2015 1:52 pm
by Lord
Wow, this is powerful. Did it affect you that much?

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sun Feb 01, 2015 4:09 pm
by Aron
LordPivot wrote:Wow, this is powerful. Did it affect you that much?

I felt really guilty, but I'm over it now. (thumbsup

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sun Jun 07, 2015 5:15 pm
by lordkazari
wow this is really deep (cry (cry (cry (cry (cry

please write more the feels im recieving rite now are really powerful

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Sun Jun 07, 2015 5:22 pm
by Anton
lordkazari wrote:wow this is really deep (cry (cry (cry (cry (cry

please write more the feels im recieving rite now are really powerful
Oh look, a 4 months bump. "rite" here. (neutral

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Mon Jun 08, 2015 2:38 pm
by Franklin
lordkazari wrote:wow this is really deep (cry (cry (cry (cry (cry

please write more the feels im recieving rite now are really powerful

Yeah, Aron, experience another traumatic event so that this guy can get more feels.

Re: A serious poem.

PostPosted: Tue Jun 09, 2015 6:43 pm
by Lawn Feed
this is very promising literature...